The edit has begun… Does anyone know anything about the genitals of merpeople?

The email from my editor Simon Spanton pinged into my inbox on Sunday evening. The edit for The end of Magic had arrived.

This is both a thrill and a moment of panic for the writer. The waiting is over and we can finally start on the final phase of the book before it is published, but this is also when we discover what our editor really thinks of it. Simon’s email alone was several thousand words long with a breakdown of what he liked and what needed work. It was clear, thorough and very encouraging.

The document itself is marked up with comments throughout. Structurally, the book is in good shape. No major cuts needed, no tone problems, and he identified an issue with the protagonist that has been eluding me since the beginning! This is everything a writer wants from an editor.

Of course, there are problems…

I have a character eating soup from a plate (messy)

I’m vague about the size of two armies in battle

I use the word ‘limestone’ fourteen times! (Who knew?)…

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I have a character unable to swim one minute, and then happily treading water the next

And there’s this moment with a scythe…

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Simon is great on military and historical accuracy, particularly anything naval. He’s picked me up on how many lashes a character has to endure, and the best way to survive a sinking ship.

Oh, and I have to make a crucial decision about the genitals of merpeople… Y’know, basic fantasy stuff.

Also, the short story I wrote to accompany the novel (available to all newsletter subscribers for free!) made me realise that I needed to change the timescale of a bit of my world’s history, so that will need to be threaded through the novel.

In all, I had about 320 comments and notes from Simon. I’ve spent the first few days triaging the easy stuff. The “delete this”, “trim that” suggestions, and the silly continuity errors and tiny plot holes. Now I have to knuckle down and do some serious character work, but I’m happy to do it because I know it will make the book so much stronger as a result. Also, this is my third novel, so going through the process a couple of times already has reassured me that the book won’t fall to pieces during the edit.

I reckon this will roll on for a couple of weeks and there might be even more revisions after that, and then we need to start thinking about the copy edit. Still a little way to go, but it promises to be fun!

PS. I also got a reader’s report on my middle grade novel Raygun (though that title will almost certainly change) from Karen Ball at Speckled Pen. Much like Simon’s edit notes, they nailed all the book’s issues, but have also inspired me to make some positive changes. I’ll be getting my teeth into that next. If you have a children’s novel that needs detailed and informed feedback, then I highly recommend Speckled Pen!

 

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Author, screenwriter, and co-founder of the Bestseller Experiment podcast.

3 thoughts on “The edit has begun… Does anyone know anything about the genitals of merpeople?”

  1. Hi Mark, I’m not an expert in the biology of merpeople, but here’s my theory.
    Since they’re basically fish from the waist down, I think they’d reproduce along the same lines. The female discharges a huge number of eggs, and there’s a huge waste in terms of unfertilised eggs. What happens then depends on what sort of fish they are. Sea (pelagic) fish eggs usually stay suspended in the water, but shore and freshwater fish eggs are often laid among plants. In most cases, the male discharges ‘milt’ into the water, and fertilisation takes place outside the organism. There are variations on the theme, but that’s the gist of it. As for the genitals themselves, have a look at https://www.britannica.com/animal/fish/Reproduction for a couple of ideas. There’s some great footage of sockeye salmon spawning on https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eg-MpakO1fU as well.
    I think the merpeople would probably breed in that manner, if only to settle the argument about who sleeps in the sticky patch.

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